Death to Adverbs- Day 8

Today’s Exercise: Death to Adverbs

Go to a local café, park, or public place and report on what you see. Get detailed: leave no nuance behind.

Today’s twist: write an adverb-free post. If you’d rather not write a new post, revisit and edit a previous one: excise your adverbs and replace them with strong, precise verbs.

This morning I went to the park to enjoy the day.  It’s mid- morning and there isn’t many people at the park. At the kid’s playground, I observe a few moms with their babies talking and drinking their coffee from Starbucks. The park is quiet and I just saw a few runners listening to their iPod.

I’m sitting on one of the picnic tables with my notebook in my hand and watching the beautiful view. The trees have started to show their green leaves, plus the gardens are starting to bloom. I distinguish the different varieties of colors from all the tulips. It makes the park feels calm and peaceful.  On the other side of the park there is a small pond, with a family of geese swimming and making noise. Close to the pond there’s another group of geese walking close to the gardens.

I open my notebook to start writing. The timing was perfect. There’s no distraction. I close my eyes and I take a deep breath.

The time goes by and after twenty minutes I hear a group of kids coming out of a school bus. They’re all running to the playground. Some went straight to the swing and the slider.

The peace and the quiet of the park have been a blessing. I’ve an amazing day at the park. I wrote a few pages. My mind has been recharged and energizes and ready for another assignment.

 

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5 thoughts on “Death to Adverbs- Day 8

  1. I like the begging but i would suggest to let me see what you see more in detailed. Such as “I observe a few moms with their babies talking and carefully sipping on their coffee from Starbucks. The park is quiet and I just seen a few runners with their white ear buds in.” or you can describe the headphones as “few runners with your overly sized red Beats” Do you see the difference in the description ? Let me know if this helps

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